Script feedback

After we left Steve's lecture the other day simon gave our scipts back which we did on the monday before.

Simon gave some feedback to me and Sam about our script which was about our morning journey to uni.

Positive comments: An ok first attempt, nice interplay and  the title page was formatted well

EBI: we could of improved on using less dialog and more progression with the story.

I agree with the feedback we had. I initially thought the comments would be too good as this was the first time i wrote a script but i was happy, i agree we could of used less dialog as we kept on one scene for a long time and used less action

I can now use the feedback to help with my 10 page script.

Film review

The football factory: film review

Directed by Nick Love

This is a realistic hooligan flick about a group of Chelsea hooligans and their exploits around the country following their football club. They than finally get the dream cup draw half way through the season against Millwall. A Fantastic Movie from start to finish, i enjoyed the brilliant acting, script, dialogue, poignancy and laughs. The Football Factory is a study of the English obsession with football violence and hooliganism, but there's so much more. 

Danny Dyer narrates the movie, giving it that documentary vibe, making you think you're actually watching a the events that have actually happened. Dyer's narration also gives his character a little more depth and does a good job of effectively separating him from the rest of the cast. I am basing my 2 minute film moment/trailer on Danny Dyer's character but a bit different. i this film Tommy (Danny Dyer) loves fighting, literally he loves going to other peoples firms and kicking the sh*t out of them whereas my character has lots of sympothy in him and actually fights back at the gang leader.

One thing i did spot was the fact there isn't any plots, it more just follows hooligan Tommy (Dyer) about with his gang as he begins to suffer nightmares and question his means of the life his currently living, whilst a big clash with Millwall looms. The Football Factory is essentially played out as a serious approach to the issue of football hooliganism, but there's something more there. The sub-plot of Tommy's granddad and his war-time friend moving abroad together with Tommy's recurring dreams give the story that little bit more depth.

The film is really good and enjoyable if you're a football fan and does keep you glued to the screen as opposing firms clash, but lets be honest, there is nothing else on offer really, as i said before it doesnt really have a plot but that's what going to happen in a football hooligan film, its more just supporters of each team beating each other up to be the best.

I would recommend this to anyone, not just football fans,

The meeting

The meeting:

25 word pitch: A football hooligan gang member discovers that he doesn't want to be involved in any more crimes after an innocent man and his son get beaten up.



Story: One day a father and son are walking to get the train home but then are suddenly stopped by a gang of football hooligans, the father and son don't want to cause any trouble and only want to get home, but for fun the gang decide to randomly beat them up. However the gang leader (Danny) wants his mate (Tom) to get involved but decides to go against his wishes and decides to stick up for the father and son.


locations:

Priestfield (Gillingham stadium)

Train station (night)

Characters:
Tom
approx 16 years old
short
wearing tracksuit and hoddie
quiet
mainly in a gang to look cool

Tom is a quiet football fan who is part of a gang, he only joined the firm because he wants to look cool and wants to impress his mates, he always follows Danny's orders and NEVER has any disagreements as hes too scared to speak out.


Danny
very tall
tracksuit
loud mouth
swears a lot
very commanding
tracksuit and hoddie

Moments: The Dark Knight (2008)

The famous opening scene of The Dark Knight. As the film opens up we’re thrown right into the middle of a bank heist, which also doubles as our first, electrifying introduction to the Joker.

A crew of thieves wearing clown masks swiftly carry out their heist as planned. Only, not everything is as it seems.

Betrayal and deception play into the heist and a brilliant William Fichtner (as the bank manager) rages across the room with a shotgun. As things escalate, and the money is finally collected, we’re left with only two individuals, one being the Joker.

Soon enough, that problem has been taken care of thanks to the bus driver, whom the Joker then executes. The bank manager, lying on the floor injured, gives what seem to be his dying words, telling the masked villain that criminals in Gotham used to believe in honour and respect. “What do you believe in!?” he screams.

And with that the Joker walks over, plants a smoke grenade in the injured man’s mouth and utters “I believe that whatever doesn’t kill you, simply makes you stranger.” He then pulls off his mask, giving us the first look at Heath Ledger’s iconic character. The Joker then boards the bus and drives out of the bank.

Why it's my favorite? 

Simple, the brilliant and superb introduction to the joker. 

A brilliant executed heist scene that perfectly sets the tone for the film and gives us an introduction to Batman’s newest foe. 

Story telling: short project

Dinner Date

Characters in Story:

Male: Serial Dater

Female: Doctor

Location: 
Warehouse

Characters:

Serial Dater: Keith 

  

•   Male

•   6’2”

•   34 Years   

•   Robotics engineer at Warehouse 

•   Spends free time with women and in the Gym

•   Muscular

•   Medium length hair(Brown)   

•   Calm relaxed personality

•   Law School Dropout

•   Reads Psychology books in spare time 

•   Doesn’t want to settle down.

•   Possible Alcoholic

•   Strong Loving relationship with Parents 

•   Youngest Child

                Doctor: Olga

•   Female

•   5’5” 

•   29 Years

•   Doctor/Paramedic  

•   Hosts several of Dinner Parties

•   Slender

•   Brown hair

•   Confident and out going 

•   Very passionate about her work

•   Career Driven 

•   Trusting

•   Loyal

•   Strained relationship with parents

•   Middle Child

 

How the Character meet

Plot:  During a long day at work, not paying attention Keith slips and injures himself.  An Ambulance is called to take him to the hospital; one of the paramedics that have come to collect him is Olga. In the back of the ambulance on the way to the hospital the two start talking and getting to know each other. Keith insists that they both go out for lunch in the coming days and Olga agrees. During lunch both characters have a real connection and they really want to keep seeing each other.  Over time the two characters start dating and Olga decides to host a dinner party so that she can introduce him to her sister and some of her friends. When Keith arrives at the dinner party he immediately recognizes Olga’s sister and she recognises him as someone she has previously date.  Midway trough the dinner part Keith goes to get more drinks and Olga’s sister confesses that she has previously dated Keith and he wasn't faithful to her. Olga immediately kicks Keith out of her house and sates that she never wants to see him again.  Keith decides that it would be best if he respected her decision and stayed away.

Conflict: With the decisions that Keith had made in the past with Olga’s sister, meant that his future with Olga would be put at risk. The conflict with Olga was with knowing what she did would she be willing to possibly give up her future so that she could be loyal to her sister.

Change: Even thought Keith didn’t get what he wanted, he now knows that he can’t continue with his lifestyle because he wants to settle down and move on with his life. Olga is now less trusting and more apprehensive when it comes to relationships, and she feels that work isn’t the only thing she should be focused on.   

UCA summer project

A short video about me on why i chose television production at UCA